The first drafts of my stories are often guilty of these sins and that’s why I love getting feedback from the critique group I belong to. 🙂
by Richard Risemberg
Do you love subordinate clauses? I know I do. And how about assonance and alliteration, rhythm and rhyme? Let’s face it: they can be as tasty as chocolate.
But would you make an entire meal of just…chocolate? (Okay, whoever said “yes” please leave the room now!)
Consider this a meeting of Overwriters Anonymous. My name is Rick, and I used to write overelaborate sentences. Clever and musical they were; there was just too much of them. Frankly, my dependence on brilliant phrasing destroyed my relationship with my early novels, and we haven’t seen each other in decades. The words just got in the way of the meaning after a while, exhilarating though they could be.
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